Rough Cut Feedback

We showed our rough cut sequence to other groups in our class, we then gave them a piece of paper where they wrote positive points and areas for development within the opening sequence. The feedback we received is below.

Editing
Positive - Titles were very good and in effective places such as on the wall when the main character walks past, most of the groups liked our titles and thought they were in clever places
Development Areas - One piece of feedback from a group said that some of our shots where slightly too long and we could cut them down to make them shorter, quicker and more effective. Another group thought a possibility for a title would be in the cutlery draw when the main character opens it.

Camera work
Positive - Good shot angles, especially the one from in the fridge where the main character gets the bottle of wine out and two of the other groups said the variety of shots were good and worked especially well with what was happening in the clip. Good establishing shot of house and main character.
Development Areas - One group disagreed and said that we needed slightly more shot variety by using more close-ups.

Sound
Positive - Good diagetic sounds that worked effectively, but this may have been because there was no soundtrack at the current time.
Development Areas - One thing said that was our diagetic sound was out of time with the sequence, but we have discussed this as a group and the teacher and decided we would not try and fix this till after the rough cut as it could be too hard. Also we needed to add a soundtrack which we hadn't currently finished when we had to upload.

Mise en Scene
Positive - Groups said overall that we had a good choice of location thats adds a sense of tension to the thriller sequence.
Development Areas - No groups commented on this part of the feedback section so we believe, we had the right choice of mise en scene and it works effectively.

Narrative
Positive - Very good narrative with a clear sense of where the story would be going. The main character is a good actor and plays the part of her character extremely well, especially when watching the CD on the computer.
Development Areas - Maybe considering changing the name of 'Stalk' as they do not believe it works well with the film.